Tales of Skulvar the barbarian 1:mephistos stone

[Bun-Bun]

I'm afraid I had a bit of a hard time reading it. You might try reformatting it with paragraphs, and running a spell-checker over it. IIRC, dialog is supposed to have a new line when the speaker changes. It would make your story much easier to understand. As it is, it might or might not be a good story, but it's just too hard to know.

Keep writing, though. Practice makes perfect.