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[Hammerskjold]

i haetz Pete bla bla bla bla

Yeah, most likely no one really cares much. I've seen behaviours lately that I'd bet wouldn't be tolerated here 4-5 years ago, but the harsh truth is this. No one really cares.

I'll try to be clearer. You're on a video game website, in the general section forum. On the innernets. Everyone else got their own drama to deal with.

Moving on to something more worthwhile.

If your complaint is about the length, talk to the professor, not me lol.

Page count is not my only concern. It's the amount of pages + word fillers + fuzziness = Zzzzzzzz

7-10 pages written clearly can be a pleasure and a breeze to read. A paragraph of jumbled word salad, can be a chore to digest.

Besides, you dont really have much choice, when your grade is on the line.

Yeah, I don't have a problem with that. Not every assignment or job task is OMGBRILLIANCE!!!11. Sometimes it's just an assignment, you do your best, get your checkmark or paycheck, and move on.

Basically, this paper was to consist of 2-3 pages of discussing a political thinkers ideas, another 2-3 pages of these theories applied in modern society, and finally 2-3 pages more providing and discussing specific examples.

Yeah, looks straightforward so far.

I combined the application of the theories and the examples together. Maybe this seems like why its not clear?

I'm going to go on a limb and say, forget the trees right now and just look at the forest.

I did try reading it. I scanned it quickly, I read it slower, I tried going paragraph by paragraph.

I keep getting flashbacks of this:

http://www.lipsum.com/

The paper you put up doesn't give much clarity on what you are trying to say. It reads like a rough draft version 1.5 of a book report.

'Oh whatever STFUOMGBBQ, I got an A on it!'. Here I can only guess from the info you gave me.

There were some students who struggled with a portion of the material but it seems likely most them were not poli sci majors, as this particular course is geared more for students of this major.

Is that A based on a relative scale, ie: it's best in show type. Or is it more 'these are the criteria you must meet to get this grade'. I'm leaning more towards the first type.

So this paper was a learning process for me

That to me, is about a thousand times more important and valuable than trumpeting your A.

since I completely relied on my own research, rather than on class discussions and notes to give me prior knowledge as starting point for the paper.

Be aware there is tons of needless failures caused by 'I'm going to do my own research on it'. Sometimes there is no other way, sometimes it's just plain hubris. Learn to be brutally honest so you can spot the difference.




TL, DR:

re: writing stuff goodly

The only reason I even bother in this thread, is mostly this:

I enjoy writing about this stuff, afterall its why Im a poli sci major! I cannot see myself doing anything else but something related to politics, be it writing about contemporary affairs, political theory, analyzing data and patterns related to specific political and economic systems or even being directly involved in politics itself (though this is unlikely since I love politics but generally dislike politicians, go figure

You are enthused and fired up, that's great. Your writing skills however, needs work. That is, if you want to get paid for writing. About anything. Just look at that paragraph above, holy run on sentences Batman! Well it's just a forum, it's not like it's for realsies, its just for play-play right?

So you showed us an example of your -real- stuff. And...yeah.

My 2 cents on it, don't fall in love with that grade. Don't fall in love with your own writing 'style'. Be ruthless (with your own work), get better. Kick your ego to the curb. Drop the internet tough guy 'tude.

Because once you're out of class, the real world will teach you hard lessons real quick. And the 'skills' you've displayed here so far, will not help you.

If you think I'm insulting you, or challenging you, just stop. The stuff I and others have said in this thread, are milk and cookies compared to what's out there. You waving around that A paper will be about as effective as a wet noodle vs Godzilla.

TL,DR pt Deux:

Don't waste time replying to me. Or to anyone else you think needs 'correcting' be it their wrong ideology, how they hang their toilet paper, or their preference of coke vs pepsi.

If you're absolutely serious about pursuing your field and writing gooder to goodest, go do it.